How To Craft Your AMCAS Personal Statements Including Past Examples
When the AMCAS application service opens in early May, your brain will be overloaded with lists upon lists of requirements and data points to collect. These include letters of recommendation, verifiers, contact information and transcripts. It will feel like a lot and, yet, you will eventually make it happen because you will have read the AMCAS application instruction manual closely to avoid a returned or incomplete application or, worse yet, an investigation into your application.
American medical schools usually have a rolling admissions process. Even so, applicants who make it into the pool early have a better chance at both interviewing and acceptance. So open your application as soon as the application opens and aim for an early submission, in early June.
During the fluster of activity, you will have to write a short personal statement about why you want to go to medical school. The personal statement constitutes Section 8 of the AMCAS application considered part of the "primary" application. (For a complete list of secondary essays go to medical school secondary essays)
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If you’re applying just to MD programs, then you have a single personal statement to write. It’s just 5300 characters (including spaces) with the following instructions from AMCAS:
"Use the Personal Comments essay as an opportunity to distinguish yourself from other applicants. Consider and write your Personal Comments carefully; many admission committees place significant weight on this section."
If you're applying to an MD-PhD program, refer to our blog the definitive guide to MD-PhD programs including 5 tips to get accepted.
Some questions you may want to consider while writing this essay are:
- Why have you selected the field of medicine?
- What motivates you to learn more about medicine?
- What do you want medical schools to know about you that hasn't been disclosed in other sections of the application? In addition, you may wish to include information such as:
- Special hardships, challenges, or obstacles that may have influenced your educational pursuits.
- Commentary on significant fluctuations in your academic record that are not explained elsewhere in your application"
If you are applying to MD-PhD programs, you also have to write an MD-PhD Essay and a Significant Research Experience Essay. The MD-PhD Essay is a 3000 character (including spaces) essay on your reasons for pursuing the combined program. The Significant Research Experience Essay is a 10 000 character (including spaces) essay on your previous research experience, which must include a lot of detail about the project(s) and your contributions to the work.
Your personal statement should NOT be a recitation of your CV. Your CV is just data, it does not narrate a story about why you have become interested in medicine, nor why you are particularly suited to medicine. With AMCAS, you get a few hundred characters to describe each element of your CV so save your writing on these for your sketch, unless one or two of them directly lead to a discussion of the key question, "Why do you want to be a doctor?"
The essay has to serve as your voice on paper to the admissions committee. The essay should articulate your own point of view about what you will bring to medicine, the traits you have carefully cultivated over years of education, those you were born with and your own core sense of empathy. The essay is an interpersonal analysis of who you are, aside from your accolades. Because the essay is an exploration of you as a person, it should be structured around a narrative. I am going to share with you a piece of my own personal statement from my residency applications to give you a sense of what I mean, as an example:
"I decided to become a doctor so that I could be of direct, longitudinal service to my community through innovative, and solutions-oriented work that helps people live well. At the core of my service vision is health equity, or the elimination of avoidable, unfair differences in health status experienced by different groups. My dedication to health equity is clearly reflected in my academic and work life, but it is rooted in the lived experiences of my family.
My mother grew up as one of 14 children in a very poor home, in rural central Ontario, where both parents, while loving and warm, suffered with alcoholism. She and her siblings experienced significant childhood adversity, the legacies of which still loom large. As matriarch, she supported dozens of my aunts, uncles and cousins, provided stability for my immediate family and ran a small business. She modelled, and I internalised, compassion for my loved ones as they lived through uncertainty and dislocation, conflict and loss. The doctors in my family’s story have buffered the effects of poverty and social exclusion. When my uncle Elvin was dying of liver cancer in 2008, my family doctor stopped by his house every other day to manage his palliative care, even as he continued to drink alcohol. She treated him with such humanity and with full recognition of his life arc. Family medicine is where the lives of patients are wholly expressed. I belong in family medicine because I appreciate that the patients’ social, economic and biological narratives are critical to their primary care experiences."
First, do not copy from this essay. Second, this is what I sound like. This is my actual voice. My family, friends and colleagues can hear me in this statement. And that needs to be true of what you write as well. Third, note that I am not using particularly fancy language but each sentence is carefully wound. You don’t need to use large words to craft a compelling story about what brought you here, to medicine. But each sentence must serve a purpose and have a role in the statement. That’s how you work with 5300 characters. Here's more medical school personal statement examples.
The hardest part about crafting a distinguishing 5300 characters is doing so in the absence of a traditional prompt. What do they want to hear? How do I sound unique when the purpose of the essay is so generic?
Reach back into your experiences and identify a moment that had you at the patient interface. Were you volunteering at the local oncology ward? Do you remember a patient vividly? Did you help that patient, through conversation or just by helping her find her glasses? What does this experience mean in the larger picture of why you want to become a doctor? You need to drill down to a significant clinical experience, vividly describe it, and then reach up towards a description of who you are and what you will bring to medicine.
If you don’t write often, this is a challenge. Do not leave these until the last minute. I recommend you start by writing the personal statements. Start here so you have time to consult with writing tutors at your university, to run phrases by mentors and to reconsider your approach. Writing your personal statements is not an afterthought, it should be central to the experience of applying to medical school. (Click here to learn how BeMo can help you make your personal statement stand out.)
On this note, you must go through at least three or four drafts to come up with your best statement. I say this as someone who rarely writes drafts of anything – university papers, medical school papers and these very blog posts. It comes out and it lands for me because I have been writing for a very long time and the stakes are much lower. But for my personal statements to medical school and residency? Ten or more drafts each. These statements mean so much and they will be read by such a diverse audience. They must land as close to perfectly as possible. Give yourself time to redraft. Give yourself time to figure out exactly what you mean and exactly how to say it.
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Bad things happen to people. People’s parents die of cancer in their second year of university. People get abused. People migrate countries. People experience war and famine. All of these can knock a GPA to its knees. And medical schools want to know about these experiences if they are reflected in your GPA. For AMCAS, these personal experiences should be described in your personal statements.
And this is really hard, right? You don’t want them to take pity on you. You want them to see that you are strong, capable and resilient. You want them to see all you have come through and for them to take this into consideration when they note your GPA is less than 3.8.
How you tell the story matters. Note that when I talk about my family – a complicated one, no doubt – I don’t talk about how it may have disadvantaged me to come from the middle of nowhere and be among the first to attend university. I don’t beg for special consideration because of all the hard things. I talk about how my experience of my family lent me traits that are in great demand in medicine today: equity-focused, conscious of how poverty affects health, nuanced when it comes to addiction. I focus on what I bring to the table and why. This is what you need to do if you have had an adverse experience.
If your experience is something like sexual assault, you have to be even more careful. We remain quite conservative around discussions of these kinds of crimes even though you have to live with the very real consequences every day, including those faced by your GPA. Additionally, you may have been named publicly through criminal proceedings and this isn’t something you want to lead with when trying to get into medical school. Suffice to say, if you believe the only way to understand why your GPA is low is to share that you had an adverse, traumatic experience, do so with a frame of resilience and seek feedback from your trusted inner circle around how to do this. Do not go to Premed101 or Student Doctor Network as the discussions there are not fruitful, in my view. Also try to see if your university will alter your GPA from a score to a pass\fail system for the affected courses but you MUST do this before you graduate.
And in the end, some of this is about writing skills. You have to become a good, if not great, writer in the process of applying to medical school and this is just fine. Can you come up with a good reason not to try to become a good writer? The skill will serve you in medicine in ways I am unable to describe.
Great resources on writer’s craft include Phillip Lopate’s The Art of the Personal Essay and To Show and To Tell, as well as Stephen King’s On Writing. I’ve been listening to the latter on audiobook for a while and it’s incredible.
Get an expert second set of eyes to look at your personal statement and provide you with objective feedback. That means your mom is probably not the best person to ask (even if she's an accomplished writer because your family and friends cannot remain objective and are afraid of hurting your feelings). But the reality is every great writer has an editor. You need an editor. That's the only way to make improvements to your personal statement but more importantly your writing skills which you are going to need to improve in order to be an excellent future medical doctor. Period.
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